It is a lovely poem Thank you for this.
I’m very impressed with this poem. It has some very interesting ideas and thoughts on love. I also like the imagery, such as the meeting with the angel, and I like that the poem tells a story.
I’m curious about certain parts. You say there was not a single cloud, but then you say “not a single one grey,” as if there are clouds of other colours in the sky. I like it because it makes me think, but I’m wondering what it meant for you. I also want to know more about the rose and the fruit. The person wants the rose, but the rose says that it has more thorns than petals. Is that because the rose is a “mortal thing” that doesn’t last, or is it a warning that the person might be hurt by his love?
I like the poem. It seems to have a lot of meaning.
Thanks Dan, thanks for reading my poem… 🙂
No Dan, there were just no clouds, it’s just a irony you can say that ” not a single cloud, not a single one grey” it’s just my way of representing that sky was clear and blue and the day would be just fine and not gloomy.
Exactly, rose is a mortal thing, it will never last and after all it has thorns which might just hurt someone. Love, can never be expressed through mortal or imaginary things like angels and et cetera. Love is between two beautiful people, its an understanding, sharing, compromising, and if love is based on these things, I don’t see a point of all mortal things interfering between the two lovers. I understand that you have to express your love for someone through giving them gifts and other things but my main idea was that it should not be like, “he didn’t gave me a box of chocolates on valentine’s day, so e does not love me”, but it is not necessary. This is not love. Love is to understand each other.
LA MIA (A Poem Of Love) The sky was blue Not a single cloud was there Not a single one grey I was walking down the fields Just thinking of you Just thinking of you. I wanted to see you So I decided to be at your place before the noon. As I was walking down the fields I met a beautiful rose Whom I thought would be Perfect for you. But as I touched the petals The rose squeaked out In her musical voice ‘ O Great Being! You shall leave me As I’m nothing in use to you I have more thorns then the red petals. You shall take the golden fruit For it will satisfy your love And is more beautiful than me. But you shall for your sweetest Take a rose kiss from me As my tribute to her She will be more rosy, forever, for you.’ The sky was blue Not a single cloud was there Not a single one grey I was walking down the fields Just thinking of you Just thinking of you. I went to the Golden fruit No doubt the fruit was beautiful Brighter than the sun. It was the only one To exist on the land of humans So bright, so gold-ish, perfect for her. But as I touched the Golden fruit He, in his deep voice, ‘ O! Lover! O! What I’m use to you I am just a hard fruit And the hardest of all. Your love can never have me And in some days I’ll be rotten And ugly forever. But you shall for your love Have a golden kiss from me. As a tribute to her For she will never feel weak. You shall forever be with her To protect her. As now, you must go to the angel The whitest of all, who created me.’ The sky was blue Not a single cloud was there Not a single one grey I was walking down the fields Just thinking of you Just thinking of you. The noon was coming closer So I was thrilled And I hurried to the angel The whitest of all, as golden fruit told me. The angel was sitting on tree The whitest of all, purely white. She had the two white wings And a golden ring upon her head. I approached to her, and told my thrill And in her sweet voice, she said ‘ O Great Lover! O Great Love! You shall not take me For I am just an angel who Can create the mortal things. But love is immortal, and i have no such power To create it and serve it and protect it. Love is greatest and Love is fullest If is unconditional If is deepest If is highest If is widest If is longest And if it is true, it will be immortal. And is the only immortal thing Which is loveliest and not greedy And not selfish and has no devilish power And has the power to teach a beast to love. Yes sir, Love is loveliest! But you shall take an angel kiss from me For you love as she is most beautiful more whiter more sweet. She’s great!! For she has the power of love As there are no angels in heaven too Who, has the power of love.’ With a deep sigh, I left the angel And walked till the end of fields Where was your place. As I was walking, as I thought For what I shall bring the precious For you. But then I remembered what Just the angel has said to me And I thought, my love for you Can’t be express with the mortal thing. It’s forever, immortal through out inside me, I’m your guard, you’re my hope You’re my inspiration, you’re the only, Which I can and have, for I love you Till I die. But after death, I will love you in heaven too And before if this world ends, All other faces their end, My love, for you, will still be there, Shining like a star, red and bright, full of love For you. And before the noon I reached your place You were there, waiting for me at the door. I saw you, you saw me. I hold your hand, You smiled and blushed. I saw your blue eyes, very dear to me Which were more bright then above blue sky More adorable than any other More precious than the diamonds. I kiss your hand, the golden kiss For you’ll always have the strength, beside me. I kissed your cheek, the rose kiss For you’ll be rosy forever. I kiss your forehead, the angel kiss For we can keep our love immortal And my hope you’ll always love me. And last was kiss, on your sweet lips For it was mine, a tribute to you for You love me and for I love you More than any other, And for I’ll love you, for ever No matter what happens, The kiss of Love.